Walking in our front door,
a multi-colored package in my hand
promising something has arrived for someone
“Is that something for me?”, her playful query
“No, it’s just my meds from the good doctor.”
“Still seems like a gift for me.”, her reply
Jan 28, 2023
Love Story (FedEx Edition)
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Another brevity excersise. I'm not lazy, honest - LOL!
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Love Story (FedEx Edition)
Hi, Michael,
Very nice. A tender, preserved moment. I think FedEx should hire you in their marketing department!
L
Haha! Thanks L! Best
Haha! Thanks L!
Best