a lion must roar
to remember he can
so necessary his anger
to the ends of man
like poetry in league with its pain
i hear god in the walls with the termites
i see grief who forgot why she came
i feel you in moments and forgive myself
when i remember you're not here
so as i sit folding the papers
that one day they'll burn
i plant the parts of you
that moved me most
in the minds of many and
make the smiles of strangers
remind me of you
Jan 24, 2023
Strangers
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Very interesting piece!
My favorite lines:
i plant the parts of you
that moved me most
in the minds of many and
make the smiles of strangers
remind me of you
Nice, with smooth flow of language.
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I'm biting my tongue here
...but I would never have expected something so primary from you. It will be interesting to see how this transforms into the free verse I would expect from you.
Cheers.
Thomas
If I had to pick one line
“I see grief who forgot why she came”
That is one outstanding line of poetry
Tim
dear IO,
I agree with JackWeb on his choice of favorite lines. it is good to see you posting more :)
*hugs, Cat