the lone wolf
falls prey to uncertainty
the fury of time
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
the lone wolf
falls prey to uncertainty
the fury of time
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Again
This is really something else.
It might be stronger like this
the lone wolf
falls prey to uncertainty
the fury of time
But really it’s spectacular as is.
Tim
Thanks a bunch
For the eagle eye. That suits well.
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dear Onyinechi
this is lovely. I want more!
*hugs, Cat
Thanks Cat!
I'm glad you liked it. It will keep coming your way!
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Solitary Moment
Hi, Jackweb,
This is strong. I can feel the keen sense of anxiety. Perfect title.
Lav
Wow!!
Thanks a bunch esteemed poet.
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I can relate to the strong
I can relate to the strong emotional feelings.
Good job