Transient little puffs of life
Reach deeply from one soul
To another
Transferring to man small packets
Of beauty created by God
So we are able to experience a
Few moments of happiness today
And remind us of what may not
Be tomorrow
Transient little puffs of life
Reach deeply from one soul
To another
Transferring to man small packets
Of beauty created by God
So we are able to experience a
Few moments of happiness today
And remind us of what may not
Be tomorrow
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Comments
Yeah
That’s a good observation. If you think about it we sort of appreciate them from a purely aesthetic and artistic perspective. This is really a cool way of studying the reason why we give each other flowers.
Nice job,
Tim
Flowers
Hello, Clentin,
A sincere appreciation for flowers, and life in its simple form. The first stanza seems so significant for me, I almost want to replace "reach" with "rooted" sensing such a deep connection from one soul to another.
Thank you!
L
You may be right, rooted does
You may be right, rooted does fit better
Beautiful
I have never thought of flowers in this way, although I enjoy them immensely. Thank you for sharing your simple, yet elegant perception of them.
Thank you for your comments!
Thank you for your comments!
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