Beginning
With soft felt ripples
Comes the swelling of awakened
Emotions
Each tremor becoming a catalyst
Fed by silent smiles and
Unsolicited words
Ignited by thoughts of imagined
Happiness comes the
End
Beginning
With soft felt ripples
Comes the swelling of awakened
Emotions
Each tremor becoming a catalyst
Fed by silent smiles and
Unsolicited words
Ignited by thoughts of imagined
Happiness comes the
End
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Explosion
Hi, Clentin,
Hmm...I will be curious to read your response. Ar first read, this felt like a laugh exploding. Then reading a few more times, it feels like the awareness of true happiness while with a special someone. Maybe something else? I am wondering why it had to end...
Thank you,
L
I wrote this about a family
I wrote this about a family relationship that ended abruptly.
Hello, Clentin,
I am so very sorry.
Peace,
L
Deep
After reading your comment the meaning of this changed for me immediately. It’s really a very good observation on these types of relationships. Family needs boundaries too and older generations feel differently about this.
Tim
Thank you for you remarks
Thank you for you remarks
dear Clentin,
my family of women were like living with three rattlesnakes. survival was the only relationship or goal. this is why I have a difficult time relating to your poem, but I would like to understand your message. can you help me with this?
*hugs, Cat
I wrote this after a passing
I wrote this after a passing of a very close relative
dear Clentin,
I am so sorry for your loss...
*hugs, Cat