I have been here many times
With you and without
But always remembering that places
Mean little except to bridge memories
Of the past with those of the
Present
Your presence lingers in the
Sights and sounds of what
Is today and what was
Yesterday
Comments
I understand...
this perfectly, as my good friend died recently. My window where I work at my computer faces the side of his house, and I look at it every day. Some days I have to shut my blinds, so that I can't see it anymore and others, I need to look. A great poem that helps to ease the pain. I wouldn't change a thing. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you very much. Still
Thank you very much. Still trying to write several different types of poems. I would greatly accept any suggestions, advice etc.
Thank you. I will try some
Thank you. I will try some various changes as you suggest. I am looking at several comments and am trying to see how I can possibly apply several suggestions into a revision or maybe even a totally new poem.
I both agree and disagree with Mark
It could be made into a very tight poem and I’d enjoy that however I do rather enjoy what you have here as it is. There are a few lines I find cumbersome but I like the meaning of what you wrote a lot. I leave it to you if you wanna play around with it. Try and think about where you want me to pause as a reader and put the line breaks there. Which I think you done to my satisfaction for most of them already.
I like the ideas this poem conveys
Tim
Thank you. I also want to
Thank you. I also want to play around with some changes. I think you have some good points
Remembering
Hello, Clentin,
Along with your title, your final four lines can stand alone as a brief but meaningful poem. Strong sentiment.
L
Memories
Are precious and those like you describe are cherished. I often feel the presence of a lost loved one and it brings such comfort. Good job.