Eleven fifty-two
and my brain
stared at the sleepy
white space
while the blinking
cursor on the screen
tormented me
as if to say,
"Go
l
to
l
bed."
***
Eleven fifty-two
and my brain
stared at the sleepy
white space
while the blinking
cursor on the screen
tormented me
as if to say,
"Go
l
to
l
bed."
***
Last Few Words: Tried a bit of visual poetry by placing an imagined blinking cursor, l , between its supposed words. Dunno...
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Believe me
Inspiration is an emotional torment. I'm sure of your restiveness! Nothing more than to lay your beautiful eggs on paper. Simple yet a lot said here.
Favorite lines: '
while the blinking
cursor on the screen
tormented me' - Excellent imagery!
.
Hi, Jackweb,
Thank you for reading! This was meant to feel light with hopefully a touch of humor as I tried to visually describe the words of the blinking cursor.
Thanks, again!
L
dear Lavender,
I've been there, too, lol. I liked it and could relate. I find the real problem is after I get to bed... cannot shut down the cursor in my mind.
*hugs, Cat
Hi, Cat,
The cursor in the mind - perfect description! Thank you for reading this little ditty.
L
Dearest Lavender
A delightful read. It's almost same time here and I don't really wish "the cursor on screen" thing to visit me though it often does :)
Thanks for the smile.
Hello, Rula!
Thank you so much for reading. The curse of the blinking cursor...
L
If this doesn't sound like me
Every night I am telling myself to go to bed and every night I am still scrolling my phone at dark thirty in the morning. A wonderful, simple write and great use of imagery.
Hello, Carrie,
Yes, sometimes the poem is on the tip of my fingers, but just not ready to pour itself out and I'll sit and stare at that darn blinking cursor :)
Thank you for reading!
L
:)
I know that feeling as well! Then all of a sudden, it just seems to flow.
Lav
nicee feelings happen to all who at this time with sleeping are faulting
ok goodnight we sleep...
Hello, Lovedly,
That's true!
Thank you!
Lav