When the wind is you
when you see just through
when the sun is your blood
when the sea is your guard
when your heart sings of joy
when there is nothing to destroy
Jan 03, 2023
This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week January 1st 2023 to January 7th 2023
Freedom
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Freedom
Amen to this, Anna.
L
Very strong
Absolutely brilliant. I’d have a look at that last line.
“when there is no to destroy”
Try
“When there is nothing to destroy”
Or
“When there is naught to destroy”
Unless I’m missing some meaning or if “no” is being used as a noun.
Otherwise perfect,
Tim
Well,thank you.corrected.
Well,thank you.corrected.
dear Anna,
good thoughts are like the air we breathe! great job!
*hugs, Cat
Thank you!
Thank you!