There are sounds we never hear
Like spiders walking across a mirror
Or ants moving tons of sand
And bees that on flowers land
A million sounds that are so near
Yet never reach the human ear!
Dec 31, 2022
Little Noises
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
hello,
I read this out loud...in a whisper...in respect for the feelings that the poem evokes!
*hugs, Cat
*ever, eddy
Hello Clentin
Welcome to Neopoet. I really enjoyed reading every word here, the theme, the internal and ending rhymes.
I only thought you need a more precise title.
Maybe sth like "unheard noises"
Just a thought. Your poem, your call.
Already enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing.
Little Noises
Hello, Clentin,
This is charming. It's simplicity grabs the reader's attention, and delivers so much to appreciate. I will think of your poem as I take my daily walk, and probably be more aware of everything around me. Nice rhyme and rhythm.
Thank you!
L
And
If I may suggest that you enter this piece to the new members' contest. You have a big chance to win,
Very nice...
I like the simplicity and the idea, that for as big as our ears are, we don't hear as much as happens. This is like a Kung Fu
lesson. Something I might hear a master tell a student. ~ Geezer.
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I love the theme
Great execution of both theme and rhythm/rhyme pattern
Really good,
Tim