It begins with musical analysis
she teases the harp strings
notes of fire and water
"I am the fever of Eros"
"I am the water of understanding
our pleasures are merely
a source to t he divine
if union in beauty is a bridge
from the underworld
to falcon the sage
from this mundane plane"
the lines of a tenuous beat
they recite the fragments of Psapfo:
"Lay beneath me, my idol,
my cunning virgin, for there
is nothing more harrowing
than the distance of lovers"
"I was placed here not by circumstance
but choice, my actions led me
to drink from the waters of Acheron...
by the waters of Acheron we lay down
there we wept..."
Comments
I see...
that you have made no few changes in this poem and deleted my favored lines about the sensual, heightened senses. oh well, your poem. It still reads well. ~ Geezer.
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hi Geezer
maybe I'll find a way to coalesce the two themes the spiritual and the sensual. I still have both versions in my notebook. I am grateful for opinion and do not take your advice lightly as all peoples advice its how I learn
I thought...
you had it the first time. I guess that there is something that you still want to say. ~ Geezer.
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dear John,
"I was placed here not by circumstance
but choice, my actions led me
to drink from the waters of... Acheron...
these are my favorite lines (above)
*love & hugs, Cat
Dearest Cat
Thanks so much for your kindness :)