Neopoem Of The Week December 4th to December 10th 2022 🏆 Winner

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It's All About December ( December Weekly Contest)

Has old December entered yet,
dig into earth, when hibernate;
where the used-to-be nestling-birds
are flocking 'way for warmer worlds.

Has old December entered yet,
dig into the earth, when hibernate;
furry mammals, those walk on four,
are napping days, with no real chore.

Has old December entered yet,
dig into the earth, when hibernate;
where once warmed up and happy trees
now bid a colder, farewell leaves.

Has old December entered yet,
dig into the earth when hibernate;
where floral scents, we oft pursuit
sleep in bulbs, in magical mute.

Has old December entered yet,
Keep on going, don't hibernate.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Comments

Sweet lyrics!

Honestly, i admire the repetition that flood round each line. It would be sweeter when a large group of people recite it. Then you will definitely smell the taste and the echo of this song. My credit to this piece is: A wonderful expression has appeared in the poet's pen.
A wonderfully thoughtful and charming pace. Depth of sound and form bloomed through writing.
I really like this line, " Has old December entered yet" Wonderful personification!
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Hello JackWeb

Thank you for the great review. It really made my day. Really appreciate the time you took to read and comment

It's All About December

Hello, Rula!
I enjoy your poetry for many reasons, one being that I am exposed to new forms! This is exceptional with rhyme and meter, along with the repetition of the first two lines. Four quatrains and a couplet - and an endearing theme, too. Lovely!
Thank you,
L

Dear Lavender

Thank you so much. I was aiming for a sonnet, but when I got four quatrains, I wasn't able to decide which one to give up. Consulting with my younger son, he assured I shouldn't leave any, so I think I've got here a new form especially with the refrain lines.

You don't know what it means to me to be read and commented on by the masters like yourself and the other fellow poets at Neo.
Always greatful dear.
Thank you