a sophisticated silence
scuttled away my peace
pierced my giant hope
I am now a living danger
planted in the sands of time
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
a sophisticated silence
scuttled away my peace
pierced my giant hope
I am now a living danger
planted in the sands of time
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
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Silence Threat
Hi, Jackweb,
I find this to be very stirring. One of your best!
Peace to you,
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I'm
Always thankful for stopping by.
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I sincerely hope...
that your life isn't in danger because of your political views. Nice work, it makes one reflect on our world and the dangers of speaking out in some countries. Stay safe. ~ Geez.
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Always thankful for stopping by. I'm save Gee ...
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