Jackweb
Jackweb
Nov 29, 2022

A TASTE OF LOVE

Your love is nourishing goodness
I felt highly and gladly satisfied
there's nothing to compare you
glancing on your sparkling eyes
has define the beauty of divinity

your skin deep is a finished line
the ingenuity of God's creation
the smell of grace is all on you
that's why I want to be with you
to stay inhaling your sweetness

honestly, your love has freed me
I'm now sitting on top of the wind
the dominion of love and gladness
has surrounded all over my being
I'm like the wind turbine giving light

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

About This Poem

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About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo

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Comments

Lavender

Hello, Jackweb!
A tender poem of gratitude for a lover and their love. How wonderful to feel this way toward someone and write such lovely words: ",,,I want to be with you, to stay, inhaling your sweetness." Very tender. May I suggest "nourishing" instead of "nutritious" in your fist line? It may sound a little more poetic and flow a bit smoother. Also, I would suggest something similar to "freed" instead of "enlarged" in the first line of your final stanza - to also sound a bit more poetic. I know as poets, love is one of our favorite subjects whether we are in love, or not. I hope this poem is truly part of your life.
Thank you,
L

Rosewood Apothecary

More romance from you good sir. I don’t know who she is but this heroine is some muse to inspire this sustained greatness. Last stanza is fire. Excellent poem.

Tim