Celso G. Tertins
Celso G. Tertins
Oct 11, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week Contest October 9th to October 15th 2022

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insectoid

a train of a billion ravenous centipedes
circles the earth every morning
looking for their next meal.
each minute,
a helpless prey is drawn into this mass,
ripped into pieces for consumption
before the metamorphosis.
then a cocoon for shelter,
a carapace for skin,
a mandible for lips.
emerges another insect to wander
slithering beneath office tables at night,
and hard-to-clean spaces,
at extra cold storage rooms when no one else is looking,
on scrap piles illuminated by city lights
that are varying shades of green.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Republic of the Philippines.

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Being quicksilver better. This one has me a Kafka this morning. Bugs and coffee like Naked Lunch.

Tim

Geezer

perfect! The pacing is much like the fast centipedes I see slither along the cracks in the basement next to the washing machine when I turn on the light. I see your background of Sci-fi consumption in evidence here. I have noted that many
Sci-fi authors have taken animal life from the natural world and enlarged upon their unique aspects to bring us monsters.
Nice stuff!
~ Geezer.
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