Lavender
Lavender
Sep 26, 2022

Undisciplined

I want my food
I want my internet service
I want to be first in line
traffic to get out of my way
and my pizza delivered on time

I want the best
phone
television
sneakers
vehicle with the best
sound system

I want my politician to win
my thoughts and beliefs to be right
and my way of living to be left undisturbed

I want to be able to trample my footprints
through fields of tender flowers
just to manifest that I was there
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About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser

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Comments

Michael Anthony

Excellent look into the culture of me, me, me - well done L! The 4th line in first stanza seems like it would benefit from an "and" in front of traffic. Maybe like this:

and traffic to get out of my way
Deliver my pizza on time!

Really enjoyed this - thank you!

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Lavender

It seems we fall into 4 "me/my" categories: myself, my stuff, my way of living, and my space on this earth. It's good to take inventory from time to time. I will think about your generous suggestion. Thank you very much for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L

Geezer

This satirical offering is a great piece to show how the "Me Generation" has gained control of the world. Well done! ~ Geezer.
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Administrative Council

It's about growing up to me. I want is a very juvenile perhaps even toddler stage of life, before we realize that we can't until we earn it.
Very nice reading lavender.
Mark

RoseBlack

A good depiction of what society has become. No one seems to want to work and earn anymore and those of us who do work and earn, can't get a leg up. Things are definitely backwards. Good job.

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