My journey

To day
A bitter closure
Set my mind free
No more will I wonder
Reasons and questions
To the saddness that weights heavy within me
A smiple document
Gave a explanation
That God call her to heaven
With a illness
No one could see.
She was healthy
We all believed
I guess God needed another angel

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This was about my girlfriend that passed away on may 16 I found her when I got back from out of town she was already gone.i had to kick in my door. So I never knew what she died from. Until I got the autopsy that was the smiple document that said she had a heart attack

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About the Author

Country/Region: Detroit Mi

Favorite Poets: my poets are john Coltrane and Sarah Vaughan OK they are not poets but their music is reason that I write . I want my poetry to flow like their music

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Comments

So sorry...

for your loss! Yes, not knowing how or why can be sad. I like the simpleness of your prayer-like piece. I hope that writing it gives you some comfort. ~ Geezer.
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Hey My friend I've been gone for so long and I miss writing but when my girlfriend passed away I had to find a way to put my tears on paper or keep crying forever