You were wild,
A tempest,
Free and unyielding,
A restless soul of great visions,
Loneliness your happy companion,
As you shattered the common,
With ink and pen,
You left us breathless,
As you breathed into us,
A new beginning,
For those who loved without regret,
And lived without fear.
Jul 21, 2022
My Wild Rose
About This Poem
Last Few Words: For the writer who writes fearlessly.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
dear C Wolff,
I love your imagery. it jumps right off the page at me! the beauty of this poem feels pristine and pure. inspiring... I want some...
*hugs, Cat
Thank you so much! :)
Thank you so much! :)
Wild roses...
a favorite of mine. I like the simplicity and untamed feeling of this. Nothing that I would change. If I haven't welcomed you personally, welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you so much!
Thank you so much!
Keep ‘em coming
Another great offering. My suggestion if any would be
You left us gasping,
As you breathed into us,
Choose any word you feel works. Conversely could change the verb “breathed” in the second of those lines. It’s a matter of sounding redundant with to forms of the verb “to breathe” only separated by a few words.
Other than that it’s another amazing poem,
Tim
Thank you for the feedback!
Thank you for the feedback! Much appreciated :)
My Wild Rose
Hello, C.Wolff,
A very passionate poem. It always surprises me how poetry reveals itself while in the process of writing it. I feel the revelation here, almost like an awakening. That "aha" moment that leaves us breathless.
For me, I am wondering if I would feel a little more apt to "live without regret, and love without fear", but I still understand the inspiration.
Thank you!
Lavender
Thanks for the feedback:)
Thanks for the feedback:) Appreciate it.
Wonderful
Nothing I would change! Excellent flow and language! I look forward to reading more.
Thank you :)
Thank you :)