I rise and stand
I shine my light
I have been through it all
Despite the fright
Such oversight
Scars cut deep a wound.
Words that bled my heart
A distressed and abusive life
Early childhood into teen
Teen into adolescence
Adult into marriage bed
Oh how I try to make sense
The endless pains into years.
What is buried deep between the layers
Stitched and intertwined in the layers of my skin
My body is numbed to this hellish life
Yet wounds pierced through
Like a sharpened knife
Cutting through my skin
It nudges me ever so often.
I remember the days of so much pain
Of my muted voice and endless blame
Shame to lift my head up high
Nor accept my destiny
I burned, I cried
I screamed, I dreamed
I felt the darkness seeping into my head
Just like my demon trying to explode
Whispering words, “Do kill yourself no one wants you.”
The sun came out, and warmed my face
Life flowed into my veins like an ocean deep within
I opened my eyes and looked up at the sky
Smiling I am a survivor, once a victim now no more
The tales of my story will be told
To touch the hearts, too much to unfold
To fight, to love, to live and hold.
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dear WP
in this line: Adult into marriage hood; I would change to (Adult into the marriage bed) there is no such thing as Marriage hood, IMHO. these lines resonated with me:
I remember the days of so much pain;
Of my muted voice and endless blame;
Shame to lift my head up high;
Nor accept my destiny;
I burned, I cried;
I screamed, I dreamed;
I felt the darkness seeping into my head;
Just like my demon trying to explode;
Whispering words, “Do kill yourself no one wants you.”
I think we have the same demon or else they are twins!
Candlewitch thank you for
Candlewitch thank you for sharing your comments. I will make the edits. I resonate with your comment "I think we have the same demon or else they are twins."
LOL!
you made me laugh!
*hugs, Cat
A wonderful read
As always you have impressed me. The way you affirm your identity as a survivor and not a victim is crucial to not only the poem but to life. I continue to enjoy reading and watching your writing evolve.
Tim
Tim thank you for taking the
Tim thank you for taking the time to read this piece and sharing your kind words.
Just a few...
things to help make this smoother.
"A distressed [and] abusive life
[Stitched] and intertwined [in the layers of my skin] I do not find the word [wooled]
adds to the idea of imbedded in your skin, likewise the word [matched]
I would delete the word [Still] from the line:
"It nudges me ever so often" You will have made your point without the use of [still]
The sun came out and warm[ed] my face
Get rid of the semi-colons and punctuation at the end of your lines
Unless you are writing prose and in paragraphs, you don't need it.
I was touched by the intensity of this one; maybe it was the line:
"Do kill yourself, no one wants you"
I am glad that you have set yourself on the road to recovery and are determined
to help others. Good luck in your career. ~ Geezer.
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Hi Geeza thank you for taking
Hi Geeza thank you for taking the time to read this piece and share such insightful comments. I truly appreciate all the edits and grammatical changes. I am happy this piece resonated with you. All your suggestions I have made, Thanks much.
My pleasure...
that's what we do here. ~ Geezer.
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