Words.unwritten
Jun 30, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week June 26 to July 2nd 2022

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Rainbow rhapsody

If you could hear colours
And if you could see sounds
You would hear the rainbow
And see how my heart pounds

Each time that our eyes meet
And as I hear your voice
A colourful musical harmony
Erupts without a choice

Blue into yellow
Yellow to red
Creating warmth in my heart
And hope in my head

You brought my colours back
my soul No longer black
see the beauty from my song
all the others saw it wrong.

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Country/Region: West Yorkshire

Favorite Poets: Byron

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Good meter. Good title. I like the subject matter. It’s a nice complete thought. Well composed. I like lovey stuff!

Tim

Candlewitch

all of that and, I most like these lines:

You brought all my colours back
The depths of my soul No longer black
You see beauty from my spirit song
When all of the others just heard it wrong.

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

I love this!...
I do believe that your intention was for the lines to say:

"If you could [hear]colors
and you could [see] sounds

You would hear the rainbow
and see my heart pound - I changed the line just a bit to make the rhythm
. just a tad smoother.

I would delete the word [musical] making it:
"A colorful harmoney
erupts without choice"

You brought my colors back
My soul no longer back
See the beauty of my song
All the others saw it wrong

Of course, as always, it is your work and you can do it as you like. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

This is gonna be cool. What do you want for splits when it hits Spotify. We get like $.00003 per stream. Lol! But seriously though piano power ballad.

Tim