Geezer
Geezer
Jun 06, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:

Super-hero or a Villain?

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Superhero or a Villain?...

He left his drink, ice melting
whiskey on the rocks
Strode down the dim lit alley
out to the city blocks

Maybe it's a little nothing
just a phantom voice
but then a scream of horror
now, he had no choice

He turned the corner running
saw the victim on the ground
Three drunken men were circling
"Hey look at what we found"

"A dirty little whore, she is
Come and get some free"
He said; "No, and you ain't either
Who says? I guess that's me"

Three blades came out and swiped the air
He grinned and pulled his knife
Said; "You've made a big mistake
and it's gonna change your life"

They muttered threats of mayhem
tried to stab and slice
Killer danced and ducked them all
his eyes as cold as ice

He ignored the threats, and antics
their crude and stupid calls
He closed with them one by one
and he removed their balls!

Now they lay dead and dying,
on the dirty street
Wondering who was that hero?
As they lay at Killer's feet

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Candlewitch

this is on hell of a write!! but to business first, these lines should have parentheses:

He said; "No, and you ain't either
Who says? I guess that's me"

Said; "you've made a big mistake
and it's gonna change your life"

my favorite lines:

Now they lay dead and dying,
on the dirty street
Wondering who was that hero?
As they lay at Killer's feet

you've got a bit of both worlds here, LOL! good luck!

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

for catching the thing about parentheses. I changed it so that I would only have spoken content by Killer, and then forgot to add them! Nice catch! Yeah, I figured that Killer kind of fills the bill on both ends. What do they call it? An anti-hero? Anyway, glad that you enjoyed. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

please forgive me for dragging this posting back to the top of the stream? I just think it is so good as to have more reads and chance for comment! I love it!!!

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

He cut off their balls!!! My favorite part. How I love Killer and look forward to seeing whose life he ends next.