Mr joghe
Mr joghe
Jun 19, 2022

A Ride For The Dead

I’ve the dead with me
In the abattoir near the mountains
Where they dried their bones and flesh
For gold and silver of the Midianite;
Maybe someday, I’ll carry their memories
To the table where the state is ruined.
Perhaps today, I found them without footwear;
Running on the street to retreat to the tree
Where their names are tagged;
In the cold and winter, they felt all alone.
I’ve called the pen-riders to pick up my fight
When I have slept in the pot of soil.
Will they ride their pens on the potholed roads that linked us together?
When gold is smiling on their tables
Will they strike the wall with their pen-axes when they’re locked-up?
I’ve the dead with me everywhere I go
To break the story of the gods.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: *pen-riders is refer to the poet's *Abattoir is where the innocent people in the country are killed.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Osun, NGA

Favorite Poets: William Wordsworth

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Comments

Candlewitch

you could have left a definition of words like: abattoir, pen-ridders, etc in the space for author's notes. I like the last line of your poem (probably because I am a bit morbid and because it is a great line...it saves the poem.)

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

I do believe you have told the tale as it is. I think that you must have spelled [pen-ridders] wrong, it should be spelled with one [d]. And you need an [ed] on the end of [lock] - up. Other than that, I understood the poem well. ~ Geezer.
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