What I was I am no longer,
I am older and I'm stronger,
What I've achieved, I've done alone
You were gone and I have grown.
Never again am I blooded and beaten,
In your world that I felt so incomplete in.
Didn't stay strewn and ill-tempered tossed
I escaped, and you have lost.
Last Few Words: Just bouncing ideas around for a domestic abuse poem, not complete yet
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
dear E.p.
you have a very good start... I will pay attention and wait for you to continue this piece. you never disappoint! I hope you are well.
* warm hugs, Cat
Thankyou
It is a work in progress, I have been having bad dreams and flashbacks recently so I decided to write something punchy and positive to be my hearts anthem.
I am well I hope you are too x