~Onyinyechi~
I look up to the heavens to explore
how the sunrise relaxes with glee
and the crescent moon tried to implore
to move away from the sun and flee
the splendor of the sky's prime
glittered under the pale moonlight
I felt rejuvenated under it's clime
the cosmic system now my delight
the vastness of the cosmic world
demonstrated divine energy
the infinity of the netherworld
shall the unjust sing their elegy
~Chandra~
Over my verandah darkness enclosed
On frequent rolling of my pupil
Heavenly crescent moon superimposed
To witness a miracle I mustn't scruple
The charmness of light
Is felt only when darkness falls
Vacant blue sky given a birth to a knight
Prepares over a hitch and forestalls
Rainbows above us created a beautiful living
God father descended from the celestial city
With the power to pause the hunting craving
Therefore, life must be lived pretty witty
©® Onyinyechi & Chandra
Comments
Pretty nice...
collaboration! There are many places that seem to join perfectly and in saying that, I do believe that you will find yourselves a duo in the future. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you Gee!
I would have preferred indications please.
The only...
criticism for your part is to delete the [ess] in [sing[s].
Chandra has made reference to looking up at the sky from the veranda
and called attention to the moon, while seemingly in your company, and the rhyme from each
of you is very good. I felt that you were composing side-by-side. ~ Geez.
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Heart felt thanks Gee!
You always on the look out for putting one through. Much appreciated!
Yes, between me and Chandra it was a choice to write side by side.
dear Onyinechi
the splendour of the sky's prime
glittered under the pale moonlight
I felt rejuvenated under it's clime
the cosmic system now my delight
I like these lines best. only one thing wrong, you have misspelled (splendor) splendour.
*hugs, Cat
Hello Cat!
Thank you for been my eye. I never noticed that.
I do believe...
that the spelling of splendor and several other words with the ending or/our, depends on what part of the world that you are from. In many parts of the world the spelling of these words may be one or the other; depending on if you may be in a
British or American english-speaking country. ~ Geez.
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Ok, noted
Thanks for pointing it out. That's the same word Cat said about. I appreciate both of you!
dear Onyinechi
I learned something (on this question) from Geezer, too!
*hugs, Cat
Yes Cat!
We learn on a daily basis. I found Geezer as an anglophile! He is quite an academician.