Do I run with the wolves,
or hide with the sheep?
Am I a secret you hold close,
or the one you couldn't keep?
I question who I am to you.
I am seen in a different light.
I sit in the shadows,
but find me you just might.
Cause I know who you are to me;
More than a best friend I can't lose.
You must love me if out of everyone,
I'm the one you choose.
May 23, 2022
Who am I? I am yours
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I know I haven't posted in quite a while, but nevertheless I've kept writing. I would love to excel in this talent and I need advice to do so. Thank you for reading and feel free to let me know how I could have made this poem better.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
dear scooby,
it has been awhile since you have been on site. it is very good to see you. I hope you will visit more often :) I very much like your love poem. just one thing: 'cause is a contraction of because so please use 'cause. the rest of the poem is great. the title is good but maybe Geezer can think of a better one. the flow and language usage are excellent. beginning and ending are fine. on second thought...the title is fine, lol my favorite lines are:
I sit in the shadows,
but find me you just might.
Cause I know who you are to me;
More than a best friend I can't lose.
don't be a stranger ;)
*hugs, Cat