CLIMBING TO THE HEAVENS

The affable night gave me the secret of how to come to heaven safely,
and the bold clouds laid out his support that I should climb bravely,

the moon was so proud that I was anticipating to come to his sight,
but coming up so far I was terrified by a gigantic moon light,

and a dark cloud was clustering trying to play a role of a good Samaritan,

but the embargo of fear of silence gripped the atmosphere yet I'm the titan,

who intends to visit the kingdom of God and His angels.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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