Sainted thief
Salute!
Thieving saint
Decorated.
When a palm frond made for shade
Is burnt to ashes,
Not even skeletons can mask his beauty.
When a parliament gives you an award,
Be certain of a visit from ant-infested woods.
When a Cardinal fresh from conclave,
Frolics in hideous huts,
Broken kernels will adorn his neck.
What sort of medal was he expecting?
Like David's who slew tens of thousands?
You became transfixed in soured grapes -
Fresh from hallowed chambers,
All in shades of intent.
Corrupted by the palm wine they gave you:
High and tipsy in your jubilation of robbery;
A dreaded hunter shadowed to a dingy cell.
In torrents of shame
Prancing about on
Rancid banana peels
Greed has coloured the medal
Adorning your shadow's neck,
Like a canvas
In mixture of blood
Of victims' pains.
I wonder what runs through your mind
In the chambers of prison.
Comments
hello,
When a parliament of baboons gives you an award,
Be certain of a visit from ant-infested(faggots.)
Extremely Disparaging and Offensive. a contemptuous term used to refer to a gay person, especially a gay man.
this line makes no sense: "All in Halloween of intent." to me, a wiccan, Halloween is a religious holiday. it has been warped into a night that children go from house to beg candy and other treats.
High and tipsy in your "highness" of robbery;
A dreaded hunter shadowed to a dingy cell.
"tipsy and bold in your (jubilation) of robbery"
In (torrents) of shame prancing (try using: another word)
(On banana peels.
Costumed,
Yellow on the outside
Black on the inside) get rid of this and say: rancid banana peels
I wonder what runs (in) your mind (through)
your title is okay. the topic is good. but you need a better (whatever your language is to English translator) and a good dictionary/thesaurus and a better understanding of the rules of Grammar. this poem is a good start.
*hugs, Cat
Thank you Cat for your
Thank you Cat for your critique to make this a better poem.
hello again,
your corrections have made this a much better poem. it reads more smoothly now. thank you for using my suggestions. have a glorious day!
*hugs, Cat
I'm glad the poem appeals to
I'm glad the poem appeals to you. Hoping it does to others. We keep getting better with each other.
Thanks again.
My Opinion
The work to me portrays current political situation of the country Nigeria
When a parliament of baboons gives you an award,
Be certain of a visit from ant-infested faggots
and i think i understand your dictions better
Thanks
Yes, it resonates well with
Yes, it resonates well with all who are abreast of affairs in Nigeria.
Thank you for reaching out.
Regards.