This poem-- MOMS SMILES depicts her departure
...to the new home
no where
on an airy road
to no where
yet it speaks of the whole truth
inch by inch
as she crept into the wilderness
created for all
no lack of space
all are
and will be welcome
one day
this happened five decades away
can any one relay
MY MOM'S SMILES
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dear lovedly,
put a space between (This poem MOMS SMILES depicts her departure) this and the second line. this is a lovely poem for your Mother. it flows nicely. it shows that you loved her.
*hugs, Cat
I wanted to walk
Further that I did with this piece. Your highlighted moments within the poem are dramatic, tho.
I would alter the title a bit: “This poem MOMS SMILES depicts her departure“ to only “Her Departure”
‘Course, if you were making this a contest entry, then the title is to include the subject of the contest…. And if you were making this a contest entry, you should also use the drop down menu on the Submit page to delineate it.
Dear Ray If only you had read my poem
MY MOM'S SMILES
YOUR views would drastically change
INCLUDED
Thanks
As always...
Ray gives you good advice. I can see your Mom smiling, she had many smiles for you and your love. ~ Geez.
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you three are
my well wishers
will amend
its no competition
just my remembrance
it so happens
MOTHERS DAY
TODAY
hurray for mom
all moms
WE PRAY
Thanks
Kindly Mark