She holds the mike up close
pearls loose around her neck
the dress she wears is clinging
His heart races on unchecked
The sound of her entrancing voice
plays loudly in his ears
And from the shallow shadows
He sees her lonely tears
Tonight, is the bloody moon
it must be red and stained
The season of his madness
can no longer be contained
There are two other pairs of eyes
that watch, and take it in
The man and dog with chilling orbs
contemplate their sin
The flesh of evil tastes so good
in proportion, it is sweet
Anubis stifles a sigh and growl
He wants to eat fresh meat
Frozen, makes a meal it seems
but, freshly caught and killed
Makes a better tasting meal
and sharpens up their skills
Anubis born to chase his prey
Jaws showing pearly whites
Shivers in anticipation
for the activities tonight
Killer sees the coming attraction
he's had the preview before
The monster waits in the alley
and watches the peeling door
Comments
You maintained
The basic rhythmic structure is in good feet. Well composed! A master is always a master!
You are...
most generous with your praise. Thank you, so very much, ~ Geezer.
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Hi Geeze
line 7 try shallow shadows for alliteration. Looks like you let killer out again lol.
Thanks Stan...
that works great! ~ Geez.
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hey guys,
up above #2 Sire Song (Siren Song) in "Last few words"
I love this piece and think I see where you are going.
it is good to see Killer and Anubis out and about!
I really like these lines:
There are two other pairs of eyes
that watch, and take it in
The man and dog with chilling orbs
contemplate their sin
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy
Hey Cat...
Thanks for catching that! Yes, Killer and Anubis are feeling the Springtime! Frozen meat is okay for the winter, [neither of them like hunting in the cold] but, it's time to get rid of the lazies, and some of that fat around the middle. Their next-door neighbor
who sings at the bar down the street, has told Killer about the creepy feelings that she has been having when she leaves work in the early morning. She says that her car has been gone through and some things have been missing from her clothesline.
So, they said that they would look into it for her, and not to act differently, just go about her business; they would be watching and wouldn't let anything happen to her. So, here we are. ~ Geez and the boys.
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hey guys,
fresh red meat is the juiciest and the best! I can hardly wait for more, LOL!!! eddy is really enjoying the read!!!
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy
Glad to hear...
that you and eddy are hungrily awaiting the barbecue over the weekend! I may have to write a fifth edition of the saga, just to celebrate! Of course, not everyone will know the where or what about the meat; that's one of the little mysteries that Killer and Anubis keep for themselves and close friends like eddy. Big hugs, Geez and the boys.
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A continuation of Siren Song, like a part II
Nicely done! It's like could see these two put together.
Your musical images work well, and the introduction (or continuation) of the relationship is a nice touch.
Thanks Ray...
You are cordially invited to the barbecue celebrating Spring! ~ Geez.
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