Beloved...
for: Steven
be calmed...
my beating heart
finds tranquility,
within viewing
the crags and lines
of his beloved face,
for he is
as the dawn to me.
a light,
that promises life
a new morning
of discoveries
in an otherwise
mundane existence.
he is the universe
I subscribe to,
he crowns
my actuality
with all the glory
of his composition.
because of him
I am immortal,
burning with
the fire of the brightest star,
potent as combustion
in an infinite firmament!
*
Comments
Exquisite !
This is pure adoration given to someone whose creative value has enlightened your life in one way. What a lovely creativity!
hey Jack,
he is my first reason for living. poetry is my second love. thank you so much for reading and responding!
*hugs, Cat
Exquisite !
This is pure adoration given to someone whose creative value has enlightened your life in one way. What a lovely creativity!
Love as a theme
So good to write about. It would be difficult to read anything but a caring, gentle space in what you wrote. Congratulations on finding someone like you have!
I have never been terribly fond of the short lines, and that is just me. Lots of folk write in the short lines. I have some difficulty getting my point made except in more words in a line.
Yiu piece flows very well, and I like it!
thank you Ray,
the short line just works for me in some poems. in others I like a longer line. thank you for reading and giving me your honest opinion. I appreciate that very much!
*hugs, Cat
Sis,
yup!,
you nailed it. No critique, Steve would kill me!!...& possibly eddy!
Perfect!
One
dear Bro,
thank you for your support , and the joke, LOL to tell the truth, he is embarrassed by the poem. I miss you, where have you been? don't stay away so long!
*love, Sis
You have...
hit a mark here, with anyone who has ever purely loved another. I will just have to steal the word that Jack Webb used, to describe my feelings about this piece. Exquisite! ~ Hugs, from the boys. ~ Geez.
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thank you Geezer,
for reading and commenting...he is the light in my life. it took me 30 years and 3 marriages to find him. when I quit looking, that is when I found him. he is a bit myopic, he thinks he is the lucky one, LOL
*hugs, Cat
Lol
Just laughing here. So funny indeed Geezer.
Can only be a copy cat Cats here
as the observant
have already said
I SAY
E X Q U I S I T E L Y
EXQUISITE
any one would be jealous
as one corrected me say man
zealous
Cats that you b
all Neos can c
LOL
thanks lovedly!
*hugs, Cat