Jackweb
Jackweb
Apr 06, 2022

I'm Emotionally Broken

I am emotionally broken and angered
a boy beast pounced like a bird of prey
on a feminine skin with heavy
punch on her eye lid she bleeds

I'm emotionally instigated
trouble awakes with fearless ambition
causing nuisances and
stirring war of attrition

I'm emotionally outraged
this attempt of molestation
a stage fight against a woman
shall never go scot free

I'm emotionally disappointed
our own is now against us
our own is now hunting us
our own is now bet to fight

I'm emotionally stabbed
beyond forgiving
this threat of life
is now ripened

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo

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Comments

Candlewitch

in this line: I'm emotionally outrageous I think you mean (outraged)
these lines effected me the most:

I'm emotionally disappointed
our own is now against us
our own is now hunting us
our own is now bet to fight

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

This piece is emotionally charged. A brave and well written expression of an ongoing issue that is all too often minimized. Well done.

RoseBlack

This is a problem that seems all to 'normal' in today's world. Revictimizing the victim has become acceptable. The very reasons why domestic violence victims don't speak up. Raising awareness is the only way to make progress

Ray Whitaker

So appealing to one's place in emotion. So cleverly written! This not only struck a nerve, in me, it pushed me as well into thinking about the distance in our lives.

Jackweb

Ray that's just it. You nailed it through. It was written because of family issue. My only sister was beaten by a cousin.

Thanks for reading through.

Candlewitch

one more little thing: in this line: shall never scot go free (shall never go scot free) reverse go and scot.

*hugs, Cat