Take a seat at the circus, the rest of the world is here.
Your status as an onlooker is luxurious to say the least,
although you seem to be strangely frozen in your seat.
You should ready yourself for a spectacular show,
see the ghostly clowns in the circus ring, Grozny, Aleppo,
and more you know, so don't say you weren't forewarned.
My good friends war and strife arrived early at the ring and
reserved the best seat for me. They knew my mind at the
outset and prepared the ground for us three.
But if you know what's good for you you'll kill me now
and learn to suck-up the consequent pain,
I'll only start to grimace and growl and lose all sense
of proportion, denying what I might have been,
and when I start to get aggressive, as I surely will,
I'll lash out with flailing fist and vicious kick,
piling up bricks to throw at anyone who dares,
pulling bombs from my back pocket and lobbing them
into the ring the very moment the lions start to perform.
I have the capacity to commit such crimes on a massive scale,
murder at one remove is such a simple, abstract thing for me.
You may try to appease me and mitigate my rage
but I strongly advise you to heed my words
and to kill me now before it's far too late,
before I make a desert of this once fertile place
and all you can do through gritted teeth
is to welcome it as some fragile kind of peace.
Mar 10, 2022
Vladimir Goes to the Circus (Kill Me Now)
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Obvious without saying really, but should be read in the context of the current Ukraine crisis...
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
I like your title...
your [poem], seems more like prose, but that is okay. I enjoyed it and I'm sure that most everyone else will too. Your language use is good, and the theme is one of current interest. The pace is fast, but not so fast that one gets lost. It is logical and consistent from beginning to end. ~ Geezer.
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Thanks, that's helpful. I don
Thanks, that's helpful. I don't entirely agree about it reading like prose, but I'd be interested to know what it is exactly makes you think that. I tried to make it flow, although it's a bit clunky in places I think….
hello,
I like your title.it fits the piece of work. the pacing moves right along with no dragging spots. in reading the body, I get a case of the chills! I HATE clowns, they have always creeped me out severely! good poem! I agree with the parentheses in the title!
*hugs, Cat
Thanks for your supportive
Thanks for your supportive comments. Not the most uplifting piece, I know, but these are the times we live in...
welCOME to the website!
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Thanks, more coming up…it's.
Thanks, more coming up…it's. slow process!