I want to stay up all night,
but I don't know what for,
Full wardrobe, empty bank balance,
Yet I'm always wanting more!
My heart is racing
and my mind won't shut down
I need things to fix my problems,
And I want it here right now!
I will have them in every colour,
I always fancy something new
That will fulfil my constant craving,
For perhaps a day or 2.
Knee deep in parcels,
But nothing is in the fridge,
My cupboards are all empty
Time for another nothing sandwich.
Don't judge me, I'm learning,
Next month I will be all over this.
I know I said that last time,
No I am not taking the piss!
I am in complete control,
And I know I will stop real soon
I just need to pay 5 grand to ebay,
And £500 to Carolina dressing room.
Comments
Hello...
I have wondered where you had gone.
I will hope for your complete recovery
when you may get your impulses under control.
It is possible!
In the meantime, keep writing and working on it.
1] I would delete the [balance] in line three
it helps the rhythm and does not hurt the idea.
2] change the line: I need [that] to [stuff]
delete the [all] in line three second stanza
3] [fulfill] proper spelling
4] Change line two in fourth stanza [and I know I'll stop real soon]
Good luck, and keep writing, We miss you!
~ Geezer.
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Hiya
Awww hi I've been busy getting myself better with EMDR and the right meds, I'm in a manic phase right now and it's weird because I normally write when my mood is lower, but this morning I was awake shopping for more stuff I don't need and the words popped in my head.
Hope you are well xxx
I'm well...
as can be expected. Thank you. After rereading, I realize that I was wrong to ask you to delete the word [balance], I'm not sure what I was thinking. Sorry. ~ Geezer.
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hello!
I remember you! how have you been? I have a suggestion: before you "hit" the enter button to post your poem, read through it to catch your mistakes. I am OCD and DID, so I understand much of what you say in your poem. the right medication helps me greatly. it took trying a lot of different medications to find the right combination. Good luck.
*hugs, Cat
Thankyou
Hiya! I'm manic right now and writing poetry when I'm like this is weird, when I've of low mood I over analyse everything and make sure it's as perfect as can be but this is a rough draft that was written in the wee hours of the morning so I was just slamming down my ideas! Xx
It's lovely you missed me, I missed you guys too xx
hello again,
so don't be a stranger... or do you have constraints on your time? all I have is time, now... so I wander the halls of Neopoet and haunt the pages of poetry, LOL!
*hugs, Cat
Time
No not at all I just get busy as I'm selling clothes to make money for my anniversary in 10 days its been 10 years and I want to do something special xx