Phantoms pass through my mind
talking loudly, and waving
as though I know them
Making sense of them impossible
though I try
I'm reminded of words out of context
"What light through yonder window breaks?"
and "Who goes there?"
Sights and sounds without feeling
Just let me be...
I'm sleeping in today
Last Few Words: This is how I felt this morning, only my alarm for meds got me up, I did most of what I had to do after that, and now I'm going to take an early nap!
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
dear Geezer,
your title brings about many thoughts and memories. if you read the poem I posted today you will get a glimpse of what I mean. I just love a poem's title that flattens me with a one/two combination punch!
I really can relate to the theme, its great in a good story telling way. hard hitting, too. I had to laugh at "going back to bed" sounds like the wise thing to do!
good beginning and ending, too!
nary a foot-fault
*hugs, Cat
I've been looking...
for your poem that you posted, can't find it! I do hope that it hasn't gotten lost in that big ethernet! I always appreciate the words and comments you have for me. I was trying to explain, the feeling that I had this morning. My T.V. was still on from last night and I heard voices. The news and weather were on, and with my Tinnitus, I heard what I thought was Shakespearian
quotes. [My earpiece had fallen out while sleeping]. I kind of opened my eyes and saw a flash of light, [I suppose the T.V. going from one scene to another]. I thought to myself after ascertaining the true situation, that this would be a good morning to just stay in bed, but my alarm went off to signal med. time and I reluctantly arose, took my meds. and did what I normally do [which is have breakfast while perusing Neo. then promptly went back to bed for another hour! So, there you have it! My explanation is longer than my poem! ~ Geez.
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hey Geez,
thanks for the explanation, I appreciate it. I have a loud ringing in my left ear. I just woke up one morning with it. I changes things a lot. now I have a hard time telling which direction sounds are coming from. the right ear is still good. I don't focus on the ringing and that helps.
*hugs, Cat
Tinnitus is a bitch...
but there are the occasional bright spots. I have written a number of poems about what I thought I heard, rather than what was really said! Usually, they are funny. "Stop Dancing" is one! ~ Geez.
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hello Geez,
if it is posted on Neo, I will try to find it.
*hugs, Cat
Thanks...
it was born of a real instance. I was in that half-awake to dreaming state the other morning, and I heard my wife's voice speaking to her son. Usually, I get up, but I was tired and didn't feel like it, so my brain devised a scenario of dawn with the light coming in through the window and someone asking if it was light yet? Strange dream and I decided to stay in bed a while longer. LoL ~ Geez.
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Dearest Bro
Please excuse my lack of criticism on your amazingly brilliant poem. Today this is the poem I am going to read over and over and soak in the words until they imprint on my heart. I love this so much. You've come so far you need to start thinking about publishing your work. I'm Deadset serious.
Love & higgliest bugs Sis ❤
I am so very glad...
that you have come to read my work, [and maybe post]. I have thought about it, but I know nothing about how to go about it,
and I'm not sure that I have enough good stuff to begin with. Anyway, glad to see you and thanks for the read and comments.
Love and higgest bugs, Bro.
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Dearest Bro
I can help show you how and who to send your work to. Give me a couple of days and I'll put together a decent size list and directions on how to present your work. You won't have any problems finding enough work to send. But if you want me to? I'll go through your poems and suggest which ones I think you should send. You send what you want though because I may miss a diamond scrubbing round in the rough. I've posted. It may stir up the pigeons though
Love and higgliest bugs Sis ❤
Great poem
I have days like that. You put it into words beautifully. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you...
for your read and comments. You seem to fit right in here, glad that you are commenting and feeling comfortable. ~ Geezer.
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