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Feb 10, 2022

CROW?

A crow coasts slowly overhead
chasing its shadow on the ground.
It's dull black wings totally spread
in a tattered sky without a sound.

Would that I could fly like him
higher, higher, higher still
until earth's details become dim
with no promises to fulfill.

Where , I wonder, might he be bound?
Is he carrying a soul to the other side
through some portal he has found
where all of those passed will abide?

Likely he's searching for a field
of recently harvested corn
hoping the waste there will yield
an easy meal this winter morn.

I watch until he fades away
then I flex my neck and blink
as a sudden wind makes tree tops sway.
After all it was just a crow....I think.

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Triskelion

Carrying a should? Should be soul. Nice poem. Really enjoy the rhythm and rhyme

Thomas

Geezer

I have seen this specter gliding over a damp, cold field off to who knows where; the early bird or the outcast, who flies over like a harbinger of a bad day. I think that rather than [dull] wings, I would make them black or maybe even dull black, and [fully] spread. The third [higher] just doesn't quite fit, I think that [higher and higher] makes the rhythm and meter better.

As per always, you bring a hidden world to light, where not many others tramp, fly and float. Thank you, ~ Geez.

S

As always I appreciate your visit. I like the dull black idea but think I'm gonna keep the 3rd "higher" read it out loud and see what you think

lovedly

could be blindish tho
eagles like me site all typos
Stan you know
long distance I fly
why like a black crow die
I love your poetry that's why
as you away from mine
fly

Triskelion

line 9 is grammatically incorrect also, let's see if you can find it.

Thomas