The night is dark
no sun
nor moon
Galaxy asleep
but you
must have seen snow
shining like my teeth
normally I don't grin
NO TEETH
LOL LOL
COME AND SEE
Through veiled clouds
will ye
The night is dark
no sun
nor moon
Galaxy asleep
but you
must have seen snow
shining like my teeth
normally I don't grin
NO TEETH
LOL LOL
COME AND SEE
Through veiled clouds
will ye
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hmmmm...
an open invitation from lovedly? I'm sure that some buxom lady of the night will take him up on that! LoL Nice change from your usual fare of death. Your little joke about the teeth rings true with most of us old timers! ~ Geez.
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oooooooooo lovely what a change
all are welcome 'tis magicnation lol
geeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
I like this poem. It's short
I like this poem. It's short and sweet with just the right amount of humor.
ABBY
Many thanks
Hi loved
Yep when clouds are thick the night becomes as dark as the inside of a black cow lol. Your teeth are likely still white as they sit on your bedside table.............
ones I have are sticking out from my mouths web like elephant's
I have no bed side table
hence NO
dinctures
no typo just scribbled
A show of humor here
I smell a scintillating wit in the poem. Lovedly knows how to bring humour in the scene. I love the aptness of the poem.
APT HUMOUR FOR
ALL NEO POETS