Absence

Love isn't a burden
until it is gone
A failure of stone
I thought was forever

About This Poem

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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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Comments

Hi Michael Anthony

It's probably just me, but I get the first two lines and the third just escapes my reasoning. Was it meant to do that?

Thomas

Thanks for stopping by Tri.

Thanks for stopping by Tri. The third line was intended to convey that we often take our loved ones (or lost loves...) for granted, and that they will always be there for us.

Cheers

Also, a lot of my poetry is

Also, a lot of my poetry is inspired by the brevity of haiku, sometimes this works to the poem's advantage, and sometimes I may miss the mark. Merry Christmas!

Cheers

Aah, I see

I was trying to apply weight measure to the word "stone". Cheers, and Merry Christmas to you as well.

Thomas

hello

Brevity often requires the reader to think.......thanks for the headache lmao

It uncovers the heavy Metaphor in the poem. The impact of metaphor is to represent ideas through comparison. It allows poets to convey vivid imagery that transcends literary meanings , creates images that are easier to understand and respond to than literal language.

Simple verse but needs a poetic mind to break it apart.

Well written Michael Anthony