Gracy
Gracy
Sep 04, 2021

The Visit

Iron gate, unlatched,
cedars quietly swaying;
from the West, a new moon sails by.
On your tomb, neglected –
one wilted rose and a letter of goodbye.

Moonshadows cast scintilla of radiance
on your picture framed by granite:
praying, I pause with clasped hands.

Soon the dawns
will be merry and twittering,
there will be luminous tomorrows.
Keep living –
don’t be drained by sorrow.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Río Negro, Argentine Patagonia , ARG

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath

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Comments

Gracy

Hi Ray, thanks so much for your comment. Not sure I know what you mean, but all nits are welcome. I had in mind my sons, Robert and Patrick, who died very young, 21 and 29 years old.
There is, of course, residual (and far more) sorrow remaining to this day.
Best wishes, Gracy

Gracy

Gracy

3 years 7 months ago

Hi lovedly, thanks for always stopping by with appreciative comments. You're right, devotion to the past of my loved ones is still present today.
Bless you, Gracy

S

most excellent imagery as well as message

Gracy

Gracy

3 years 7 months ago

Hi scribbler, so glad you like it. I still want to work on it, I'm not satisfied myself with it.
Thanks for dropping by. Best wishes!