Viviana Smith
Viviana Smith
Aug 23, 2021
This poem is part of the challenge:

Neopoet Random Challenge 6

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Green eyed boy(I wish)

Your emerald green eyes draw in my heart
I hate the days we are apart
I love your smile, your twisted grin
Your heart's the prize I hope to win
I see you stare at the black haired girl
Like in your eyes she's a shiny pearl
I wish your gaze would fall on me
But if it did I'm sure I'd flee
So in my heart I'll always find
That green eyed boy I wish was mine

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Texas USA

Favorite Poets: Shel Silverstein

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Comments

Geezer

[Not to pry], but is this real? You have written, what I call a crush-poem and a good one! There is only one thing that I would change and I'm not sure that it would make any difference. I would change the [was] in the last line; to [were]. Glad you stopped by, nice to see that you haven't lost all interest in us. Please keep writing whenever you can. Been wondering how your stories are going? Anything new? ~ Geez.
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Viviana Smith

Yes this is real,
I have been writing stories and I just started at a new school who is able to help me become a better writer.
Thanks so much, i started reading this book about this girl writing poetry in this secret society, and i was remided of this site so i decided to write a poem.

Triskelion

Please write here more often. I really enjoyed your "crush" poem and there are people here that can help with writing, too.

Thomas

Geezer

you keep coming back. It really means something to us, to have our family keep in touch.
~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey

Oh, I think you are going to have a wonderful life, Miss Smith.
Go get your "green eyed boy",
use him,
slightly abuse him,
I'm pretty sure he'll be grateful. (I know I was)

Obi.