lovedly
lovedly
May 16, 2021

Twinkling Light.........{MINOR EDIT}

As they inform you
there is no light in my eyes
my Love don't ever cry

I have been so long with my love dearly
now when I sleep eternally
'twill not be a surprise

you knew all this while
day would come in inimitable style

waiting since ages
has always been some oneI have no siblings
who should have wept now none

Keep vigil over me throughout the night
recall every moment we smiled with delight

just look deep into the mirror and say
yes you loved me this lovely way

I have many times more believe me
days we lived together have gone
the sunshine had shone yet not forlorn
will still come many a memorable morn

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 11 months ago

demise is the sound of someone who has given up. I don't believe that you should do that just yet. You still have the strength to write. What would I do without someone like you, to harass? [Twill should not be a surprise?] I would eliminate the [should].
And you plan to go out, in inimitable style? Are you going to go out in a blast of heroism? Saving the world? What a way to go!
I would expect nothing less from my favorite egotist. Save a child from a speeding car or rescue a family of ten from a blazing house fire! All these stories are yet to be written! Write them! I'm waiting. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Thanks I also read and reread
the egotist is now sinking ///the world is shrinking ////only Gee is still linking
all others sleeping
should has gone more ideas will come //now life is normal elderly fun I love ur harassment ////it's like pepper mint
Gee thanks for the kicks

Triskelion

prepare for triumph over sin. It seems to me this expression piece is a call to arms of sort and I am moved by the imagery you created of someone reflecting in a moment standing in front of a mirror....that private place where we can reflect physically and spiritually at the same time. You have an obvious passion and I sincerely believe that you are a soldier of goodness.
Embrace your muse. It is difficult to be heard nowadays.

Thomas

lovedly

You have given such an accolade
to a poetic soldier
dancing in front of a mirror

In all sites my poems are read
since passed 15 years within the hour
here it took 5 days

I had to change the title
so many times till you two came on line
I bow

Triskelion

call it an accolade, but an observation. I can only relate to poetry in the manner for which it is intended and your piece inspired me to reply.
For your appreciation, I have posted a poem. I hope it will intrigue you and perhaps inspire you also.

Thomas

Gracy

Gracy

3 years 11 months ago

Hi lovedly, so many comments and I can only say what you poets are tired of...lol. Try to snip out extra words and join a few lines together. It will be a smoother read that way, methinks, my lady.

Roscoe Lane

Just popped in to say hello old friend, no comment to make about poem. Still trying to get back in the groove. I will explain later. Regards Roscoe...