Can you find me?
Surrounded by fake identity
Who am I?
Who was I?
How to act?
How to love?
How to try to be normal?
Please help me!
One big question mark clothes me and darkness
What am I?
Where am I?
Who could I be?
Try to stay calm
But how
Lost all alone
What is my identity?
Nov 02, 2020
Identity Theft
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is how I feel in high school. Trying to figure out who to be and what to act like.Who to hang with and who to avoid. Its really cool though how many of my friends have read this poem and got the message i was trying to convey.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I'm glad...
that I found this one! It reminded me of when I was in high-school, but was so sure of myself and that I didn't need anyone but my close circle of friends. Man, how much I deprived myself of! [But my main object was to avoid school as much as possible] and I didn't worry about the 'losers' that kept going to school. I didn't grow up until I was much older and got a GED and attended a couple of semesters of college. I know it sounds cliche, but just be you! You sound like you have your act together. I like the theme, your title drew me in and your pattern, word use and logic was good from beginning to end. ~ Geez.
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Thankyou
Thanks, I really tried to get that point across and i'm glad that you saw it!! U should check out my newest poem about rain if u haven't already!!
If you mean...
"Water's Embrace" Yes, I have read it and commented. ~ Geez.
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