I need to hear three words,
gotta know,
I Gotta KNOW
3 simple words
the world could be right
put an end to what seems like endless night
Just 3 little words,
held back
makes me wonder
makes me wander alone,
on a broken path of cobbled stones
not a clue which way to go and
3 simple words
to light the candle in the window
in the tower on the shore
3 words
3 words
to guide me home, seal the fractures in my soul
let me feel
3 easy words I long to hear again
a distant memory of.....
heart racing.
eyes dilating
I can't recall what possesses me
when I hear, 3 simple words whispered in my ear
May 15, 2021
Three words
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I guess it is what it is
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
I am going...
to assume; [I know, assuming makes an ass out of U and me]; that it takes a good bit of emotional turmoil to bring you to writing a poem. I can hardly believe that someone who is so good at it wouldn't do more of it! Be that as it may, I will commend you for writing of these emotions. My one problem with this piece, is that you use numbers in it. I do think; that even if it takes rearranging the lines so that they fit the page better, that one should use the written version of numbers, to do otherwise, makes it look as though the writer is lazy. I don't see any evidence of that here, just an oversight. Nice work, and write more often, you are very good! ~ Geezer.
.
reply to Geezer
good point Geezer, I agree about the written form of numbers I just kind of like the way 3 looks, it has the appearance of the top half of a heart broken in two
Andrew
It is so nice to see you writing here once again. Maybe like should be added ?
like an endless night
reply to c
yeah it works better with like
hello Andrew,
do you remember me? I remember you. I love the passionate energy in this, it almost comes off as being desperate to be understood.
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy
-
hola
Yes of course I remember you, thanks for commenting and it
s good to see you again.
hey!
I, for one, would love to see you here more often... we really need great poets like you around!!!!
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy styx
-