Write a poem as an alter ego.

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Choice Cuts... [May Contest]

My knife is sharp, it cuts real deep
The edge does glow and gleam
I hate the bad guy, see him weep
It is my fondest dream

To see them pay for their crimes
It makes me happy, see me grin
I've done it so many times
This time the villain doesn't win

I will make of him steaks and chops
The meat doesn't go to waste
I love the sound of when joints pop
here's a stew just for your taste

Say Hi to Killer, let me cook
Make a meal for you sublime
My dinners come from my cooking-book
Please, bring a good red wine

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

hello Sir Gee,

We, eddy styx and me, just love it when you and Killer get to work. your poems are ripe and juicy, and a person can sink their teeth into them!

I have one question/suggestion. in this line:

"I will make him steaks and chops" how about: (I will make of him steaks and chops)

ever, eddy styx
*hugs, Cat

Thank you for...

your critique and comments. I believe that you are right, it will flow better. I have another adjustment or two to make and I will incorporate your suggestion when I do. Thanks again, ~ Geez.
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