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Neopoet Random Challenge 3

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A DREAM

I often have this strange and poignant dream
Of a lovely maiden who is sweet and dear;
A beautiful dame of yesteryear,
She kneels with reverence beside a stream.

And then in the night she comes to me,
In the moonlit mountains, tender, of the spring,
Which inspire songbirds in the trees to sing,
In a minor tone, near the fountains by the sea.

JOHN LARS ZWERENZ

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Gerard Nerval

Comments

I like the theme

Dreams have always been vivid influences on me.

I thought the first stanza flowed better than the second. The second had more meat to it, tho. Just IMHO.