themoonman
themoonman
Feb 16, 2011

Faith

Truth ... do we want it
why do we bridle magic
and ride with closed eyes.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Geezer

Geezer

14 years 2 months ago

Indeed, well done! This makes me think of all of us that ask for truth, then say the light of it is too bright!
I don't know if that was your intent, but oops, there it is! ~ Gee

S

All I want is the plain truth
unless of course it be uncouth
or reflects badly on my cause
forcing me to think or pause
and by the way it must agree
with how I want the world to be
so give it to me short and straight
why do you now hesitate ?

but you already said this with a lot fewer words lol..........................scribbler

themoonman

I'm afraid there's no one or easy answer to your question,
it would be a much easier road for all if there were. Often
the truth hides from us and doesn't come out until things
become ugly, and hard ... but most of the time it is already
there, hiding behind our own defenses. I don't think the truth
need be delivered offensively, but at the same time, the line
where each person is offended is different, not something
one can generalize ....

loved

loved

14 years 2 months ago

five seven five only
then alone we all can make
a sweet haiku

is this true ????
just learning syllablising....

themoonman

You can look up "haiku" on google and find that
there are many different interpretations, but I do
believe the 5/7/5 is the most widely accepted style,
at least in the Western sense of poetic styles.

Richard

CCfire

Nice haiku here, I am fast becoming a fan of these, I have read Basho and enjoy the way he shaped them, the shape of the poem being more important to him than the strict syllable count that does not actually equate in english but this and some of mine that I consider my best seem to always come out 5,7,5 without counting.

themoonman

Welcome to Neo ... I too like the Haiku but I'm not very
good at it, I do like to try though.

thanks for reading

Richard

CCfire

I am enjoying being here so thanks, there are some really good sites online regarding Basho who is the 'father' of the haiku and senryu so give it a look, his poems have a very eastern influence but they remain quite calming and serene in their words.