The Eccentric poet
The Eccentric poet
Mar 13, 2021

Depression

You are the disease that spreads,

The pain that never ebbs,

Waiting evoking,

Round my throat silently choking, 

Despising deeply determined to offend,

Will the headache and heartbreak ever end? 

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I wrote this last night as I was so down.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Lichfield UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Oscar Wilde

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The Eccentric poet

Thankyou so much lovely I will try that, I find when I'm down writing helps me feel better even though the outcome is not always good, thankyou so much for your feedback xxx

The Eccentric poet

Great to hear from you! I sometimes try to write in a singy songy kind of way! I should maybe try write something something shiny and happy next time to stop unleashing my monsters on you all lol xxxx

The Eccentric poet

Family Portrait was on Instagram! That's amazing thankyou so much for telling me, and thankyou for supporting my work xx

S

This poem does a good job conveying emotion. You might play around some with the placement of your commas i think

Geezer

your title is not conducive to a fun read, I read it and was emotionally involved. That's good! So good to see you writing!
Yes, yes, and yes! Try writing something shiny and happy! It can chase away the blues very quickly. Sometimes, when I am
not feeling my best, I try to write happy thoughts and make fun of the things that come from under my pen. [keyboard]. You will be surprised at the things that can come of it. Keep writing! ~ Geezer.
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