Clad in the dark garment of night,
you walk into my dream,
wearing a diadem made of all the stars
I see in the night sky. Each one
of those countless sparkling gems
represents a single thought of my love for you;
Cupid gave it light to let you know,
I’m thinking of you; always.
How desperately I try to hold on
to each minute detail of your face—
and recall your loving words.
You are my passion; my longing;
my undying soul.
Where you are not, I cannot be.
Jan 14, 2021
At Night
About This Poem
Last Few Words: written in appreciation of the one I have.
Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
At Night
Hi, Jerry,
Wow...this is incredibly honest and open. Your language is deep and direct. Your last line could be a poem in itself. Stunning write.
Thank you,
L
Hi, Ms. Lavender;
I truly want to thank you for your wonderful comment. Indeed, I am blessed in my life with my wife. Thanks, dear Lavender.