Beauty is in the eye of the beholder and I promise youll always have my eye.
Out of sight out of mind isn't always true,
whenever we are apart
my mind always wanders back to you
Don't ever stop looking at me
with eyes that remind me of bamboo
healing in nature,
yet they always make me fall through
I hope you always think im beautiful
even when you realized you bit off more then you could chew.
Dec 02, 2020
beauty
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
How very nice...
to see you again! This is a great poem to come back with. I kind of think that you should even up the lines to make it more pleasing to the eye, and make sure that you use puncuation and watch your tenses. [Realized] should be realize or when you have realized that you have bitten off more than you [can] chew. I hope we see a lot more from you. Welcome back! ~ Geezer.
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may avoid cliches* and small typo I'm rest Gee has covered
*Beauty is in the eye of the beholder
*Out of sight out of mind
otherwise nice poem o young one