Soon, Dajjal will come.
Oh colossal will he become
Over Adam, no he won’t be shy
No place but two left to hide
Call out to the police
“Oh no, they are corrupted, Denise!”
Man, you won’t be prepared
I will go to Madina, this land will be shared
No, in Madina he won’t come in
Growing less time until he arrives
But, until he comes
Entitled will man become
Ah, many will lose
Won’t be one of those fools
Aware I will be
Returning of He (AS)
Enter to what the world will become.
Last Few Words: so I’m testing out this format that I made up. I don’t really have a name for it. Basically, it’s a rhyming poem, but the rhyme can be in any pattern, and the starting words and/or the ending words spell a sentence and each stanza is a word. I’m pretty new to poetry all by itself, and I think it’ll be fun to try this out. This time, the first word (not symbol) will spell the sentence.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Hello manofgod, interesting
Hello manofgod, interesting poem. I'm not very fond of religious poems because they tend to set up arguments, but you're welcome to post them all the same.
Welcome to Neopoet, I don't believe I've read your poems before. I'll have to google Dajjal, haven't heard of him. I love to learn about new spirituality.
The title, spacing and the format you're experimenting with are good.
I'll return, Gracy
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ok. ty for being honest
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