Carl Halling
Carl Halling
Sep 03, 2020

Memories Flow Back Too

I go back,
Sometimes it’s filled with pain,
I go back,
Nothing will be the same,
Precious places
I first knew,
When life and youth
And love were new,
I flow back,
Memories flow back too.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: London Metropolitan Area.

Favorite Poets: William Shakespeare

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Comments

Geezer

piece of work to start the day. Not free verse though. The rhyme stands out. I think that maybe you should look at deleting the word [though]. It kind of makes a stutter in the first lines. I would say that you should put it at the head of the second line, but then it makes it look awkward. I think it better to get rid of it. I like it just as much and it doesn't change the meaning any.
As always, it's your work and yours to do with what you will. I am not the know-all here. See what other people think. ~ Geez.
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Geezer

thumbs up! Ypou are right, it sounds much better. Glad to help. ~ Geez.
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Carl Halling

I'm so pleased you like it, yes, both from London, born and bred, me. Geezer gave me some great advice, I tried it, and liked what I saw. I am with you there, it is great to learn, there is always more to know in the poetry game, I love it all. Bye for now. Carl.

S

I don't think a few rhymes preclude a poem from being free verse. Indeed I have been saying here for years that hybrid poetry like this might be the direction in which poetry is heading. I have no suggestions for improvement (and Thai is a bit rare lol)