Rula
Rula
Jun 22, 2020
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Titles

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When Nighttime Sings a villanelle (Titles Workshop)

I pray for stars at night so bright,
behind the clouds they sing and sway,
away they have a wise foresight.

Beta punched the devils eye ~ a sprite
so often fights for knight's foray.
I pray for stars at night so bright.

Zet inspires the poet's write
when shines above the lover's bay.
Away, they have a wise foresight.

Eta emits an extra light
to guide the souls who go astray.
I pray for stars at night so bright.

Acrux anchors far to excite
the traveller's eye, then shies away
Away, they have a wise foresight.

A tiny creature might be to sight,
together make the Milky-way.
I pray for stars at night so bright
away, they have a wise foresight.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Hope I could make justice to sir Alan S. Jeeves title. "When Nighttime Sings a villanelle" Was a great fun to write a villanelle. And no doubt it was an inspiring title

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Comments

Rula

Rula

4 years 10 months ago

You make my day with your wonderful comment!
Hope others including Alan will like it the same
Thank you dear.

Rula

dear to try new forms. It's always good to get out of your comfort zone, it's how we grow, and yes, don't hesitate to ask for help.
Thank you dear for your kind thoughts.

Rula

Rula

4 years 10 months ago

It's great to hear from you. Your excellent means me alot.
As I said earlier, the title is inspiring andI enjoyed writing this as expected.
Thank you for your encouraging words!

Rula

Rula

4 years 10 months ago

Would like to read some of yours, I am sure that I'll enjoy reading it.
Looking forward to it.
Thank you for the kind visit.

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 10 months ago

I enjoyed reading this and could put myself in an ancient civilization; looking up at the stars as if I were a priest or shaman and I went right along with the rhythm. Nice, nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Rula

My pleasure....Thank you for the kind visit.
It was a great challenging time to get the rhymes and rhythm right throughout!
Thank you!

Lavender

Hi, Rula,
I admire this so much - you make it look so smooth and easy. Plus an appealing theme! You inspire me!
Thank you!
L

Rula

Rula

4 years 10 months ago

What could a poet ask more than be an inspection for such talented poets. I'm so pleased to know that this appealed to you, no doubt 50- 50 credits go to sir Alan S. Jeeves for the inspiring title.
Much appreciate it.

S

Being the unlearned amateur that I am I thought a villanelle would be about an ice cream lol. But matters not, I think this is a suitable poem for the title

Rula

That would have been certainly more delicious.